Thursday, July 14, 2011

How is this for the beginning of a book?

it was okay but your first line needs some work. maybe start when he is in the investigation at a really vidal point, like he gets shot and then flash back to the beginning.Saying going into this i never thought this would happen, then talk about meeting the boss at starbucks. I would drop the whole diary thing. the first page has to be interesting else the reader won't go on.

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